Oooooh nice. Better interplay between plot and sex than I usually manage and I love that it's as much an Alison story as a them story. Very well put together.
The urge to Britpick is strong in me (it's mostly for the character voices), but I shall resist (unless you'd like me to?).
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Date: 2010-04-30 06:08 am (UTC)The urge to Britpick is strong in me (it's mostly for the character voices), but I shall resist (unless you'd like me to?).